A good foundation to build your 9 key frames from. Good use of dialogue to move the story forward and some hyperreality built in.
To improve: you need to make more detailed description of the stylistic MES ie does her costume change - or her hair? What will happen to the location when she is in the corridor, how can you use chromakey or green screen to alter this or jump cuts where things disappear or break continuity? The blurred faces work well but Eternal is far more hyper-real than this in its use of camera and composition yet done on a low budget. Rather than a bed it has a whole world made out of the bed under the covers. As your Macro is on style for narrative purpose you need to develop this more apparently yet cheaply.
A good foundation to build your 9 key frames from. Good use of dialogue to move the story forward and some hyperreality built in.
ReplyDeleteTo improve: you need to make more detailed description of the stylistic MES ie does her costume change - or her hair? What will happen to the location when she is in the corridor, how can you use chromakey or green screen to alter this or jump cuts where things disappear or break continuity? The blurred faces work well but Eternal is far more hyper-real than this in its use of camera and composition yet done on a low budget. Rather than a bed it has a whole world made out of the bed under the covers. As your Macro is on style for narrative purpose you need to develop this more apparently yet cheaply.
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